Not Really a Review of Something not Ready to be a Book

Screenshot (1101)First you have the title, In the lives of :-: Claire and Adam (In the lives of:-),  that suffers from a little too much unnecessary punctuation.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Then you have this:

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Which suffers from random capitalization, incorrect word usage, lack of the common comma, and no period at the end. Yes, yes, I know what you are thinking but you can’t stop now and why can’t you stop now? I have a cold and you must suffer.

Now read this:

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Most of that is one long, rambling, run on, ill-conceived sentence. It is only my great love for you all that is sparing you the opening scene of this, um, story, wherein the heroine, Claire, takes a bath and the reader desperately wants to take a shower using very hot water, Casteel soap, a scrub brush, and five gallons of brain bleach.

He refers to Claire’s vagina as her “love door”.

I feel like my intelligence has been molested.

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